Saturday, March 29, 2008

The Venus Flytrap.



Alluringly soft

Her moist red lips

Curled into a smile that missed her eyes

Burning hot

His drunken dimmed sight

Saw only the dimples on her cheeks

Insistently urgent

His yearning firm arms

Longed for her smooth supple skin

Coyly inviting

Her half teasing smile

Drew him quicker to her side

Intensely happy

His trusting young face

Rested most eagerly on her willing shoulder

Mockingly cruel

Her disdainful eyes

Unseen by his gullible juvenile inexperience

Lavishly abundant

His inexhaustible reserve

Of Youth ..of Wealth..Of confidence in the future

Abhorringly sad

This torrid affair

The repetitive gamble of THE VENUS FLYTRAP .


Writer's Island / 28 March 2008 /Prompts : "The Gamble" and "Torrid"


10 comments:

Greyscale Territory said...

This plant is a drama all its own.

Yet somehow, there are some parallels with the Black Widow Spider. Both are "cannibals"!

A great sculpting of the prompt!

Gemma

gautami tripathy said...

Very well written..

word by word

Indrani said...

wow, the venus fly trap must be flattered.:)
nicely written.

Jeques said...

The use of an unusual thing to write about the prompt made this piece really surprisingly exciting. You're very creative to have thought of it.

I wish you well.

~ Jeques

Jane Doe said...

'Mockingly cruel

Her disdainful eyes

Unseen by his gullible juvenile inexperience'

Such great writing, I love these lines. The entire poem was wonderful, but I especially liked those.

keith hillman said...

I knew a girl like that once.In fact I still do! (hope she's not looking over my shoulder)

Nice piece.

Linda Jacobs said...

Love the unusual metaphor! Well done!

paisley said...

very nicely done!!

One More Believer said...

scary... but oh so good!!

tumblewords said...

Nicely done - I've always found the Venus Fly Trap to be fascinating!